I like writing poetry. It's not something I would do in my spare time, though. Anyway, it wasn't too difficult for me to write these poems. The revision did help in some ways, but I just ended up switching around a couple of words. But what I enjoyed most about the process is the results I got in the end.
My favorite of the three poems is "What's Tea?" because I like the tone and what's happening. It's strange, though, because I'm not a big fan of history. Now the poem that I think needs some more work is "Magic" because it rhymes and - to me - it sounds a little childish. Yet I'm keeping it the way it is. I wish, though, I put more descriptive words in the poem. The problem for me was that I couldn't find the right spot for good, descriptive words.
The voice of my poems are nearly all different. I'd say that my "Sand" poem is a bit more seriously descriptive than the other two because it's dealing with art. The "Magic" poem just sounds like an amateur wrote it. No, I'm not declaring that I'm a guru of poetry or anything. I am just an amateur in the 'art' of poetry like nearly everybody else. Anyway, the voice of "What's Tea?" is kind of laid back and friendly because historical poems can get very boring - to me - if they are too serious. Moving on now! I used a sound in my historical poem. I used splash just to make it more 'creative' in some kind of way and to remind the readers that there is water below. I'm required to write at least three stylistic elements that help convey the meaning of my poems so the last one is that I didn't really use any diction. I guess you could say that the last poem is someone or something talking to someone.
Meh . . . Look at me typing up a storm. I'll shall end it here!
Hey Hannah!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your poems a lot because even though they all had different tones, they were all enjoyable to read. One line that you wrote that stands out to me the most is when you write "one last question, what's tea?". I liked this because it added some humor to it, or at least in my opinion. I don't know if you intended it to be that way, but it really lightens up the mood of the poem. It was an effective way to end your poem. I don't agree with you when you say that your poem "Magic" sounds amateur because of the poem- I liked it. It fit the mood of the poem, spooky and mysterious. I think that it added to that eerie, kind of creepy, mood. It sounds like someones going to cast a spell on your or something.. I sound like a crazy person but that's what I think! Thanks for your writing! Can't wait to see more posts because your poems are really fun to read! I like how you get into the character and you play around with the tons a lot.
Yay!
-Sea D'Amico