Cupcakes. Cakes in a thin, paper cup. They are toppled with gallons of frosting and adorned with hard shapes of colored sugar. I don't know which is better, though. A square piece of cake? Or cake in a cup? Either form or shape, they still taste pretty damn good. Anyway, I got my favorite flavors. Favorite flavors for cupcakes, that is. There are probably over 100 different kinds, but everyone has their favorites. I mean, one can't like all of everything.
My number one favorite cupcake is vanilla. I'm not a big fan of frosting, so I won't go in to too much detail, maybe just a little. So vanilla tastes like I'm eating a soft, moist sponge with a hint of the purest sugar from the sweetest flower. The flavor is so weak and smooth and not pungent at all. Now I don't like this next flavor, but I'm going to write about it anyway.
Dark chocolate cupcakes. Chocolate in general isn't my favorite. Now dark chocolate cupcakes can deliver a punch. Its powerful, bitter flavor powders my mouth - just like powdered cinnamon, but without the burning pain - with a boom, then a little kick at the end shows chocolate's true, sweet innocence. Now I apologize if I'm making you drool cartons of... well... spit. Cupcake flavors are just really fun to describe. Now onward!
Fruit in bread form usually doesn't taste too good. But I'd like to disagree with that! The flavor of a strawberry cupcake is simply amazing. Strawberry milk on the other hand is just plain nasty. Moving on, the strawberry flavor grows in my mouth as I bite into the soft cake (in cup form). I like strawberry flavor cakes. I had one for a birthday cake. Anyway, the delicious flavor is so delicate and light. I can picture myself in a large field and just having fun. Flavortastic fun.
Now the flavor of a red velvet cupcake. I think of it as a very mature flavor. It doesn't sound childish like vanilla. So the red velvet dances in my mouth with its rich flavor, heavy cream cheese - so thick it could be peanut butter - melts and becomes sticky, holding all the flavors in place for hours until I gulp it down (yes I do chew my food, too). But what I realized (literally after making green velvet cupcakes) is that no matter the color, the flavor tastes the same.
So I will end my mouth-watering cupcake mandatory syntax blog post here. I would also like to add in that I'm really wanting to go get a cupcake now.
I enjoyed your piece about cupcakes greatly because I am a cupcake lover myself. My favortie part wa when you described the chocolate cupcakes saying, "Its powerful, bitter flavor powders my mouth - just like powdered cinnamon, but without the burning pain" because it describes it so well in a funny way and I really enjoyed it. I can't wait to read your next blog post!
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Hannah,
ReplyDeleteI really loved reading you piece "A Description of a Cupcake" because it made me very hungry and what a coincidence but next period were making cupcakes and I will get to eat one! (: One descriptive line you wrote that stands out for me is "my mouth with its rich flavor, heavy cream cheese - so thick it could be peanut butter - melts and becomes sticky." I think its so great because I can almost taste it..mmhmmm. I also really appreciated the syntax of your piece. One syntactical choice you made that was effective was sentence structure in the line "Flavortastic fun." Even though it was a very short, simple sentence, It really added emphasis to help get your point across. Thanks for your writing.. I look forward to seeing what you write next because this one was so "flavortastic."
-Kaley Shelton
Dear Hannah:
ReplyDeleteI really drooled over you piece, "A description of a cupcake," because just reading it made me hungry. i feel like i could eat a horse right now.
One descriptive line that you wrote that stands out for me is: "Its powerful, bitter flavor powders my mouth - just like powdered cinnamon, but without the burning pain - with a boom, then a little kick at the end shows chocolate's true, sweet innocence." I think this is awesome because it creates so many images and tastes in the readers mind that its almost a imagery overload.
I also rally appreciated the syntax of your piece.One syntactical choice you made that was effective was short sentence structure in the line "Cupcakes." It really helped the reader get a beginning picture of what your talking about in the pause after the period. it also gives the word weight.
Thanks fro your writing. I look forward to seeing what you write next because of how hungry this one made me. I hope you write anther story about food! I ready to eat my own hat!
Hayden Lydick
Hi Hello, Hannah!
ReplyDeleteI very much appreciated your post "A Description of a Cupcake," because damn I really want a cupcake right now. The descriptive as hell sentence that I really enjoyed is "The flavor is so weak and smooth and not pungent at all." I really love how detailed the sentence is, it's brilliant. I really appreciated the use of syntax in your piece, specifically the use of digressions in the line "I'm not a big fan of frosting, so I won't go in to too much detail, maybe just a little." It definitely gives the piece a lighter feel, making it as if we're just chatting. Thank ya for your writing, Hannah! I look forward to what you have to read, because you are truly a great writer.
Dani~
Hannah! Hiiiiiii
ReplyDeleteI loved your post "A Description Of A Cupcake" because, well, who doesn't love cupcakes?! Good thing I have lunch next period because i am hun-gry! Your whole peice was really descriptive, but my favorite line was "Its powerful, bitter flavor powders my mouth - just like powdered cinnamon, but without the burning pain - with a boom, then a little kick at the end shows chocolate's true, sweet innocence." Dark chocolate is my favorite, so naturally this is making me drool. I like how it's just food, but it makes me feel like I have a cupcake in my mouth. I also really appreciate your syntax. One part I liked was " My number one favorite cupcake is vanilla. I'm not a big fan of frosting, so I won't go in to too much detail, maybe just a little." This feeling of uncertainty that you give us about writing it adds mystery and makes me want to write more! Thanks for your writing! I always look forward to reading your posts! yay cupcakes! :)
-Sea D'Amico
Dear Mary Hannah,
ReplyDeleteI adored your piece "A Description Of A Cupcake," because it captured the entire experience of eating a delicious cupcake.
One descriptive line that you wrote that stands out for me is "So vanilla tastes like I'm eating a soft, moist sponge with a hint of the purest sugar from the sweetest flower." I think this completely captures the way cake feels in your mouth!
I also really appreciated your use of syntax in your piece. one syntactical choice that you made that was effective was sentence interruptions in "Now I apologize if I'm making you drool cartons of... well... spit." the use of the ellipses created a pause that made me think about what you actually drool; which is spit. It also came at a perfect time because i actually was beginning to drool.
Thanks for your writing. I look forward to your upcoming posts!
-Katie Hance
Thank u so, so much! I am doing a project at school and u just helped me understand the true meaning of a cupcake! It was really hard, but u got me through it lickety split. Thanks again!
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ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing this great article.
We don't need to encourage people to eat sugars... like this girl eating cupcake. Not OK.
It was fabulous amazing 😍
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